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Tell me I'm pretty.
Tell me I'm thin.
Tell me what matters is
what lies within.

Tell me you need me.
Tell me you care.
Tell me you'd be sad
if I wasn't there.

Tell me you love me
Tell me you do,
Tell me just how long
I've been waiting for you

Tell me we're over
Tell me we're dead
Tell me to stop crying,
and kill myself instead

You could tell me anything
but I'll never believe it's true
You could take away everything,
but I'll still be in love with you.

You can force me to eat,
You can dry my damp eyes
You can take away the gun
But then, I'll bleed myself dry.

You can kiss me and hug me
and love me, all you want;
It'll only hurt that much more
when I'm finally gone.
...yeah. Only pertains to one person, not many...

and even so.


It's only running on the feeling, It's not true.


Edit; Holy babies. Thank you all!
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:iconlenbon:
LenBon Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2010
I LOVE!
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:iconboth-grew-lilly:
both-grew-lilly Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2010
thank you so much. :heart: It loves you too.
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:iconilliteratefiend:
illiteratefiend Featured By Owner May 4, 2009
I love this! It is very emotional and true.
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:iconboth-grew-lilly:
both-grew-lilly Featured By Owner May 4, 2009
Thanks! And thanks for the watch!
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:iconimmuniselectrun:
Immuniselectrun Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2009
Really good! congratulations =).
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:iconboth-grew-lilly:
both-grew-lilly Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2009
Thanks!
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:iconimmuniselectrun:
Immuniselectrun Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2009
no welcome =)
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SHARIKAYE Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009   General Artist
I so love the theory of it and I so get it!
ShariKaye:)
Beautiful piece thanks for sharing your gift!:)

without hope we live in desire..Dante
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:iconboth-grew-lilly:
both-grew-lilly Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009
Thank you so much!
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:iconsharikaye:
SHARIKAYE Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2009   General Artist
Very welcome honey!!!:)
Love your work btw thanks for sharing!:)
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:iconeatingmyownfears:
EatingMyOwnFears Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2009
:love:
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:iconboth-grew-lilly:
both-grew-lilly Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009
Thanks!
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:iconeatingmyownfears:
EatingMyOwnFears Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2009
welcome!
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:iconjeaikman:
JEAikman Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Love it :)
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:iconboth-grew-lilly:
both-grew-lilly Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2009
Thank you!
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:iconthesekrimzonflames:
TheseKrimzonFlames Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2009
HOLY CRAP! I had NO idea this would happen for you! YAY! :dance:
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:iconboth-grew-lilly:
both-grew-lilly Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2009
Thank you so much! :D I couldn't have gotten recognized without your help!
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:iconthesekrimzonflames:
TheseKrimzonFlames Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2009
:iconvictorydanceplz: I just LOVE it when this happens! :D
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:iconboth-grew-lilly:
both-grew-lilly Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2009
:D
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:iconrokimi:
Rokimi Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2009
I liked the first three stanzas the best. They flowed with each other the most.

The last three stanzas do not make much sense to me.
Is the third to last about denying a break-up?
Second to last about attempted suicide?
Last about actual suicide?

The last three stanzas also break the flow. I think this would be better as two pieces.
Tell Me: Love and Tell Me: Hate (the first three stanzas being Love and the rest being Hate)

But, it is a very nice poem.
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:iconboth-grew-lilly:
both-grew-lilly Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2009
The third to last stanza is about the inability to get over someone, no matter how much they hurt you; denying break-up, yes. The last three, I believe, are about the dark side of not believing. the underlying emotions behind, 'No, I'm not pretty at all!'- and somewhat about how pessimists will always find someway to harm themselves, be it not believing or self-harm.

And about splitting the poem up- That's a good suggestion! I'm very new to poem writing, and I think in the future I will be more considerate about the flow of words. Thank you so much for your suggestions! :D
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Rokimi Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2009
I haven't written poetry in a while either. I might have to write some in the near future. Important events and all that.

The first and second halves have different feelings and styles to them. Glad I could help.
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prb139 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2009
hey, th3krimzon1 sent me and i am glad i came...wow, amazing work, i am left speechless for this one...
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:iconboth-grew-lilly:
both-grew-lilly Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2009
Oh wow! Thank you so much! :D
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shadowdraconian Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2009  Student General Artist
this is very well written, although the rhythm breaks a few times. it's hard to find anything good on dA lit, only because most people focus on visual. very nice.
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:iconboth-grew-lilly:
both-grew-lilly Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2009
Thanks! :)
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:iconxxlonesomedovexx:
XxLonesomeDovexX Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2009
So amazing :heart:
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:iconboth-grew-lilly:
both-grew-lilly Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2009
:D Thank you!
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:iconxxlonesomedovexx:
XxLonesomeDovexX Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2009
You're welcome! :D
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:iconmakola94:
Makola94 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2009
love it... the pattern is good, and the emotions are very very passionate... which is GOOD! :D
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:iconboth-grew-lilly:
both-grew-lilly Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2009
Thank you so much! :D I guess what I was trying to get across was how, in teens especially- you can lead a horse to water...
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:iconomiclops:
Omiclops Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2009
Wow very good.
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:iconboth-grew-lilly:
both-grew-lilly Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2009
Thanks! :)
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:iconomiclops:
Omiclops Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2009
You're welcome ;)
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:iconalbido:
Albido Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2009
Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful :worship:
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:iconboth-grew-lilly:
both-grew-lilly Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2009
:faint: Thank you!
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:iconalbido:
Albido Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2009
You're welcome :hug:
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:icontyc113:
TyC113 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
This is fantastic. Absolutely amazing.
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:iconboth-grew-lilly:
both-grew-lilly Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2009
Oh wow, thank you! :)
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brokenglassphotos Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2009  Professional Photographer
Very impressive. It seems so difficult to find good written works here for some reason, maybe I'm just online at the wrong moments. In any case, I'm extremely impressed, this flows so well and very emotional. Excellent work.
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:iconboth-grew-lilly:
both-grew-lilly Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2009
Thank you so much!
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:iconjoi-joi:
Joi-Joi Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2009
This is nice, I like the way you keep it simple but it gets the message across very well.
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:iconboth-grew-lilly:
both-grew-lilly Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2009
Thank you!
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:iconjoi-joi:
Joi-Joi Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2009
You're welcome, I'm going to look through the rest of your gallery, Jamie says you have some nice things there.
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:iconboth-grew-lilly:
both-grew-lilly Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2009
:D Thanks!
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:iconptgreat:
PTGreat Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2009
Very beautiful! Fantastic rhythm and rhyme! :heart:
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:iconboth-grew-lilly:
both-grew-lilly Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2009
Thank you so much!
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:iconptgreat:
PTGreat Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2009
:D You're welcome!!
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:iconaedammair-feline:
Aedammair-Feline Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2009
Wow, this is emotive indeed :)
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:iconboth-grew-lilly:
both-grew-lilly Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2009
Thank you!
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